We started class by talking through a revision strategy for Sample Persuasive essay 1 (posted to the right). This discussion included taking a look at Ch. 7 in TS/IS where the authors point out the importance of presenting your argument in a way which answers the "who cares?" question. After talking through the sample essay, we made a list of our general approach (listed below), and you spent the rest of class working on your essay.
Revision for focus
Revision for focus
Establish the
focus (by reading through entire essay with attention to the set up + conclusion)
Make focus
more detailed => turn it into a thesis
Work on
introductory paragraph
- Make sure set up answers the “so what” question
- Use TS /IS format (TS first= give background before thesis)
- Structure set up so that it maps out (sets up the points in the order you will make them) the essay in a general way
- Conclude set up with a clear state,ment of what you will argue
Go through
the essay paragraph by paragraph to make sure each paragraph makes a point to
develop the focus; if necessary:
- Revise/change focus of existing paragraphs
- Add material (to develop or show how connects to fgocus)
- Break one paragraph into two or more paragraphs
- Change order of the paragraphs
Revision for organization:
Go through
essay again to make sure points are in the same order as the set up and that the set up provides the BEST order
Revision for development:
Go through
to make sure you have evidence for each point
Check with
the assignment sheet to make sure you hit all the requirements (Ethos pathos logos,
etc)
For next class:
Read: review the essays in the fast food unit so we can choose which ones to read for this unit
Write: post to your portfolio 1) plan to revise project 1; 2) any revisions you have made so far (so we can conference on your work for final revision in class on Thursday)
In class on Thursday we will choose essays for the analysis unit, and spend the rest of class on one-on-one conferences so you can finish your persuasive essays (project 1).
For next class:
Read: review the essays in the fast food unit so we can choose which ones to read for this unit
Write: post to your portfolio 1) plan to revise project 1; 2) any revisions you have made so far (so we can conference on your work for final revision in class on Thursday)
In class on Thursday we will choose essays for the analysis unit, and spend the rest of class on one-on-one conferences so you can finish your persuasive essays (project 1).
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