4. 28 workshop and plan to revise for analytic essay

Protocol for the workshop
Tell peer any feedback you would like

Read draft aloud )can make notes as you read)

Peer, talk about each of the points below

After discussion is complete = take a minute to provide written feedback

Post feedback to your peer at your portfolio as 4.28 peer feedback= be sure to put the name of the person you are providing feedback for

Questions to discuss in your peer review: 

Does the draft meet the requirements of the assignment?

·       Does the draft focus on the rhetorical effectiveness of the reading?

·       Does it discuss audience, organization, ethos, pathos, & logos?

·       Does it relate each rhetorical element to the focus?

·       Does it point out what could work better?

To evaluate for the GE rubric consider the following.

Genre expectations;

• the essay discusses the rhetorical elements in terms of how they work (relationships); the rhetorical elements are audience, purpose, form, ethos, pathos, logos, etc.
• uses TS/IS language = attributes points from the essay to the author, uses mostly paraphrase, uses quotations when pointing to partiular language, refers to the author using the forms from the summary unit
• has an introduction which sets up the focus, and a conclusion which pulls the essay's together and draws the discussion to a close

Focus: 

• sets up a focus on the rhetorical effectiveness of the essay it is analyzing
• takes a position on the essay's effectiveness
• discusses rhetorical elements and their relationships

Organization:

• TS before IS
• logical order = presents background information before analysis 
• effectve use of paragraphing (one developed point per paragraph and each point needs to develop the overall focus in a different way)

Development:

• detailed examples/illustrations from the text under analysis to support claims

Write a plan for revision

After you have finished with your peer review, write a plan for revising your essay.  In your previous plans for revisions, you listed the issues you needed to work on.  For this plan - write a description of the process you will use to work on each issue, point to parts of the reading you will use to develop your essay, discuss why the organization needs to be changed and what changes you will make, etc.  This plan for revision does not need to be a polished essay, but it does need to have some detailed discussion of what you will revise, along with why and how you will revise it.

For next class:

Write:  Post your peer feedback + your plan for revision to your portfolio.  They should be labeled 4.28 Peer feedback, and 4.28 Plan for revision. analysis

In class on Thursday you will create the portolio for the College Composition coordinator.  This is a new portfolio, with a slightly different format fromt he portfolio you created for me.  We will walk through this process, step by step, in class.  

We will also brainstorm and get started on the reflective writing for the analytic essay.  This will be very similar to the writing you have done for all the other units, except that this will be a focused, well developed essay.  You will need to make a series of claims about what is working and what needs more work, and those claims should be supported by a discussion of/illustrations from your writing process and from your essay.  We will work on this in class.

Good work today, and see you on Thursday.